Guyz!!what do u think of my attempt at poetry?

June 4, 2011 by
Filed under: Bukhara Rugs 


Question by Whacko: Guyz!!what do u think of my attempt at poetry?

The Young Knotter

‘My Language is a heavenly code,

it’s key resides in your heart’.

‘Casting spells of Shiraz on Paradise,

Knotting is the claim to fame’.

‘Turquoise, purple, red, blue,

n the sea green of wayward imagination’.

‘From Qom to Hamadan and back to Tabriz,

where else would you find eternal Bukhara on a knotted rug’.

‘Little knots of wonder,

nimble fingers packing Shangrila into an inch’,

Isn’t Nirvana but,

just a knot away’.

‘Rubaiyat wasn’t knotted in a day,

If only Khayyam could visit my Vale’.

‘Tales of love spun unto the knots,

each verse from God Himself’.

‘Milk of the Divine,

flows from this spring of life’.

‘Aden is a concept n Alhambra a distant reality,

Garden of Joy my friend I see in my knotted rug everyday’.

‘I Knotted young and knew no formal school,

made those intellectuals ponder’.

‘Is your education really what,

your knotted mind perceives it to be?’.

‘A young knotter but

close to extinction’.

‘Will apathy of my creed,

forever knot this mind’s freedom?’.

‘Al Andalusia survives in my fabled land’.

‘Casting spells of Shiraz on Paradise,

Knotting is the claim to fame’.

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Best answer:

Answer by stephen k
I found it a challengingg poem. I liked the broken cadence and the non-rhyming scheme.

I do not think you need the quote mark (‘) at the open and close of every line or set of lines, though

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